Feasibility research for a business plan 1226 words

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Posted Jul 15, 2015 in Letter by happy363
reshown Aug 18, 2015 by sa
Dear Lucy, How are you doing? Trust everything is well with you. To facilitate our con-call this afternoon, please allow me brief you my works done for the past two weeks: My survey for two major concerns Two major concerns remained after our last meeting, which are “Could we get enough quality talents in China working for this job?”, and “How strong-willing they want to stay with the company?” To find out the answers, I designed and conducted an online survey by broadcasting among the selected connections I could reach, they are English major students, pro or semi-pro interpreters, foreign-funded firm employees, ex or current Au-Pair workers in USA and more. The recipients of my email invitation are 145 and 36 effective ones came back. Please find the survey at http://www.diaochapai.com/survey505619 . This will be an ongoing survey to get more inputs for business accuracy and talent pool build-up as I gathered all the takers’ emails, and I think it will perform better if with proper business promotion in the future. I structured my survey into three parts: “Personal info”, “Ability related” and “work related”, which I think the first two parts could be addressed to ...
Offer Price - 1226 PCoins ( USD 12.26 / CNY 86.06 )
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commented Jul 15, 2015 by happy363
reshown Aug 18, 2015 by sa
need proofreading sample from the original document to help to select your bid. a short paragraph will be good, thank you.

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Bid Jul 16, 2015 by The Writing Doctor
Selected Jul 16, 2015 by happy363
 
Bid Selected

Hi,

I have read through the entire document. I have to be honest with you and let you know that it requires a lot of work. Firstly, I have found several problems in usage - this is understandable as the ideas have been translated from Chinese to English. Second, the paragraphs lack coherence and this makes the document difficult to comprehend. In my opinion, if the introductory special was not applicable, a fair rate for your document would be no less than 5PCoins per word.

Here is a sample paragraph:

"With respect to remuneration, she was earning a basic monthly salary of USD500. Including bonuses, the salary would occasionally reach a maximum of USD833. She was quite satisfied earning USD1100 for 8 hours a day; although, she did do a lot of overtime averaging almost 10 hours a day. She was happy enough with the job to invite her friends and ex-colleagues to join the company too."

If you would like me to proofread your work please go ahead and accept my bid.

Proposed Price (PCoins) - 1226 PCoins ( USD 12.26 / CNY 86.06 )
Promised Time - 11 hours
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Bid Jul 15, 2015 by aten

I would be happy to proofread this for you.

Proposed Price (PCoins) - 1125 PCoins ( USD 11.25 / CNY 78.99 )
Promised Time - 12 hours
commented Jul 15, 2015 by happy363
much appreciated for your bidding. however, could you proofread a short paragraph to show your ability and paste below?
commented Jul 15, 2015 by aten
reshown Aug 18, 2015 by sa
It is well written, I would just have a few suggestions on word choice and some sentence structure. For example I would change your first paragraph to "...please allow me to brief you on my work..."

I am on a mobile device now so it's difficult to send a larger sample, but I will do so in about an hour if you'd like.
commented Jul 15, 2015 by aten
reshown Aug 18, 2015 by sa
Hi, as promised, here is a larger sample of my work. These are the changes I would make to the first few paragraphs:

Dear Lucy,
 
I trust everything is well with you.
 
To facilitate our con-call this afternoon, please allow me to brief you on my work over the past two weeks:
 
My survey for two major concerns
 
Two major concerns remained after our last meeting. These concerns are: “Could we get enough quality talent in China working for this job?” and “How strongly would they be willing to stay with the company?” To find out the answers, I designed and conducted an online survey. I broadcast among the selected connections I could reach; they are English major students, pro or semi-pro interpreters, foreign-funded firm employees, ex or current Au-Pair workers in USA and more.  Email invitations were sent to 145 recipients, and I received 36 effective responses. The survey can be found at http://www.diaochapai.com/survey505619 . This will be an ongoing survey to get more input for business accuracy and talent pool build-up, as I have gathered all the takers’ emails, and I think with proper business promotion we will see better performance in the future.
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Thank you for considering my bid.
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Bid Jul 16, 2015 by luke

I am a very professional proofreader for 8 years. Please let me help you with this task. i have gone thru your original document and it really needs BIG help.

Proposed Price (PCoins) - 1226 PCoins ( USD 12.26 / CNY 86.06 )
Promised Time - 5 hours
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