A Tech article,target audience is Geek and gadget lovers 332 words

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Posted Jul 27, 2015 in Product Description by cloudsarah

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Game:  Gadia Power provides a hand-free control system, enabling you to game with natural hand gesture. You can use it to play all kinds of fun game! To be even cooler, we are currently trying to develop a boxing game using Gadia Power as gaming console. Yes! The first ever muscle sensor video game. To play the game, you will need two Gadia Power attach to both your left and right forearm, not only Gadia Power can detect you want to punch, hook or dodge, but also it can detect how hard you actually swing by using EMG and accelerometer and reflect by DC. We believe gaming experience should not be limited to visual and sound experience, it should be more real as technology evolves. In the future, we will try adding more fun and realness into your gaming experience.  

Outdoor Control: Gadia Labs believes Gaida Power can be your coolest bro, assisting you in almost any situations. It can control your music when you are working out, capture fun moments with your GoPro when you are skiing, or pick up your ...

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Bid Jul 27, 2015 by The Writing Doctor
Selected Jul 27, 2015 by cloudsarah
 
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Hi!

It is a well-written description actually! I can help by correcting the few errors in mechanics and sentence structure. Go ahead and accept my bid! Thanks. :)

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commented Jul 27, 2015 by cloudsarah
Well done,learned a lot
commented Jul 27, 2015 by The Writing Doctor
You're welcome! I'm glad to be of service. :)
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Bid Jul 27, 2015 by aten
Edited Jul 27, 2015 by aten

I'd be happy to proofread this for you. It's well written, but there are a few things that can be improved upon. For example, I would change some of your nouns to plural form.

"Gadia Power provides a hands-free control system, enabling you to game with natural hand gestures. You can use it to play all kinds of fun games!"

Thank you for considering my bid.

Proposed Price (PCoins) - 332 PCoins ( USD 3.32 / CNY 23.3 )
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