concert review2 929 words

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Posted Aug 7, 2015 in Student Essay by nerozhang

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First allow me to briefly introduce guitar. Guitar is a string instrument, it usually has six strings. Normally, people pluck the strings with right hand and press the fret with left hand. Guitar is type of chordophone, people often play it in pop music, rock music, blues, folk songs and Flamenco. There are three main types of guitars: the steel-string acoustic guitar, the archtop guitar and the classical guitar which is the guitar that performer used. Classical guitar is known as one of the world’s three major instruments, the other two are the piano and the violin. It is finalized in the classic period, so it is why people call it classical guitar. Classical guitar can be performed in several ways: guitar solo, ensemble, kanadeai and accompaniment. Therefore, classical guitar is defined as the highest value in guitar family because of its diversity, changeful timbre and rich harmonies.
Atanas Ourkouzounov(b.1970) is one of most famous guitar players and composer in the Bulgarian. He finished study in guitar, chamber music, analysis,  ethnomusicology and improvisation at the Paris Conservatory and achieved the first place in ...

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Bid Aug 7, 2015 by aten
Selected Aug 7, 2015 by nerozhang
 
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Hi, I'd be happy to proofread this one for you as well. It's well written, but could use some improvements in sentence structure and flow.

Thanks for considering my bid.

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commented Aug 7, 2015 by aten
I've uploaded the final draft. I shortened many of your sentences, simplifying them for easier readability. It's usually a good idea to try to keep each sentence to only one or two ideas to avoid having run-on sentences, which can be confusing.

And just a note on formatting: in formal wiring it's important to keep all fonts, sizes and formatting consistent throughout the document. I noticed some different font styles and sizes. Also, some titles had quotations around them while others did not. I kept your formatting style by adding the quotations, but titles can also be defined using italics.

Let me know if you have any questions about any of the changes.
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Bid Aug 7, 2015 by The Writing Doctor

Hello again Nero!

As before, there are several issues with sentence structure and grammar ( confusion in parts of speech, singular/plural, lack of articles,etc.)

If you like, I can revise your work for you. Go ahead and accept my bid. Thanks!

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