a short letter for fax or email( reposted for learning) 173 words

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Posted Aug 18, 2015 in Web Content by 1894944on
reshown Aug 18, 2015 by sa
Dear Sir/Madam, This is Brian Wang from SuperMa Media Inc. I’m here to introduce a high efficiency and High cost performance way to spread your business advertisement. SuperMa Media Inc. has close cooperation with more than 60 Chinese owner’s supermarkets. It is more than 75% occupancy of all Chinese owners’ supermarkets in GTA area. We the no. 1 in the media in Chinese owners’ supermarkets. There averagely about 2500 to 5000 customers in each store and with total around 195,000 viewers per day in all our cooperated supermarket stores. So the effect of advertisement is very amazing. I highly recommended the ad on the back of store receipt. It is highly reliability for ad information delivery to customers, and will make highly feedback ratio for your ad spread. Of cause we are not only the receipt advertisements, we also have many ways to carry your ad, such as adbar, adcap, digital signage, windows, etc. If you interesting, please do not hesitate to contact me with follow: 647-618-2566, or email: supermamedia@gmail.com Best Regards, Brian
Offer Price - 173 PCoins ( USD 1.73 / CNY 12.17 )
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Bid Aug 18, 2015 by The Writing Doctor
Selected Aug 18, 2015 by 1894944on
 
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Hi Brian,

Your writing is coherent and the sentence structure is excellent. It just needs some improvements in grammar and usage. I'll fix it for you, tracking changes as I go along so you can learn from the corrections. I'll also add some writing tips at the end of the document to help you improve your writing.

Go ahead and accept my bid! Thanks. :)

Proposed Price (PCoins) - 500 PCoins ( USD 5 / CNY 35.1 )
Promised Time - 10 hours
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commented Aug 18, 2015 by The Writing Doctor
Hi Brian!

Your document has been uploaded. As promised, I have added comments next to the corrections and a note at the end of the document.

I hope you will find my work to your satisfaction. If you have any questions, just leave me a comment here.

Thank you for allowing me the opportunity to serve you. :)
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Bid Aug 18, 2015 by aten

I would be happy to proofread this for you. Overall, it is very well written, but I see a few errors and some improvements that can be made to make it more professional sounding.

Thank you for considering my bid.

Proposed Price (PCoins) - 173 PCoins ( USD 1.73 / CNY 12.17 )
Promised Time - 12 hours
commented Aug 18, 2015 by 1894944on
same letter,  I will select a different bidder for this task, so that I can learn more from the different style.
commented Aug 18, 2015 by aten
No problem, I understand. I bid on both because I wasn't sure which one you wanted to move forward with. Thanks for accepting my other bid.
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